I have loved writing with all of you and have learned so much! Messed around for a while this morning! Here are the best of what I came up with, I think.
"on writing haiku" syllables revel in dark caves they do not wish to be dragged out pared, sliced, carved onto page. (C) Carol Wilcox, 2015
"let's just write haiku," she said. i blithely agreed totally unaware that syllables hide in dark underground word caves and vehemently resist being dragged onto white page. (C) Carol Wilcox, 2015
"On Writing Haiku" desired syllables hide in dark, underground word caves vehemently resisting white page. (C) Carol Wilcox, 2015
I love the animal-like creature hiding in dark caves and the capture and the dissection. Sometimes it seems like that sometimes, doesn't it? Do you ever find words or phrases in that process?
On a related note, I stumbled on Laura Purdie Salas' blog post where she screencasts herself writing a 15-word poem. It was fascinating to watch (though I haven't told her yet.) I was struck by how she stumbled around a bit (a lot shorter bit than I would!) and then found a phrase that became the core of her poem.
I actually wrote a bunch! There are five or six on my blog. On my blog they are in the order they came in. I started out with a variation of the middle one, but not as polished and just kept messing around with it. I have another one I started a couple of days ago, that I can't make work, but maybe someday…
P.S. I just went out to do a couple of errands. As I was out driving around, I was thinking, "It's really nice today, so warm. I won't freeze when I walk the dog." Then I heard the temperature- 28 degrees! Brother!
This one made me cry.
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DeleteI have loved writing with all of you and have learned so much! Messed around for a while this morning! Here are the best of what I came up with, I think.
ReplyDelete"on writing haiku"
syllables revel in dark caves
they do not wish to be dragged out
pared, sliced, carved onto page.
(C) Carol Wilcox, 2015
"let's just write haiku,"
she said. i blithely agreed
totally unaware that syllables hide
in dark underground word caves
and vehemently resist
being dragged onto white page.
(C) Carol Wilcox, 2015
"On Writing Haiku"
desired syllables hide
in dark, underground word caves
vehemently resisting white page.
(C) Carol Wilcox, 2015
I love these! Which one came first?
DeleteI love the animal-like creature hiding in dark caves and the capture and the dissection. Sometimes it seems like that sometimes, doesn't it? Do you ever find words or phrases in that process?
On a related note, I stumbled on Laura Purdie Salas' blog post where she screencasts herself writing a 15-word poem. It was fascinating to watch (though I haven't told her yet.) I was struck by how she stumbled around a bit (a lot shorter bit than I would!) and then found a phrase that became the core of her poem.
Syllables have hidden from me more than once this month. Sometimes I just say NEVER MIND, and leave them be!!
DeleteI actually wrote a bunch! There are five or six on my blog. On my blog they are in the order they came in. I started out with a variation of the middle one, but not as polished and just kept messing around with it. I have another one I started a couple of days ago, that I can't make work, but maybe someday…
DeleteP.S. I just went out to do a couple of errands. As I was out driving around, I was thinking, "It's really nice today, so warm. I won't freeze when I walk the dog." Then I heard the temperature- 28 degrees!
Brother!
Here are Kevin's haiku for the month: https://storify.com/dogtrax/haiku
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