Saturday, April 11, 2015

PO-EMotion -- Despair

Flickr Creative Commons photo by Mike Bitzenhofer


a tight ball,
pull covers over,
wail and wallow in darkness.

©Mary Lee Hahn, 2015

Carol, at Carol's Corner, will join me again this year as often as possible.

Steve, at inside the dog, is sharing his poems 
in the comments at Poetrepository.

Heidi, at my juicy little universe, will join us when she can.

Linda, at TeacherDance, will join as often as she can.
Check the comments at A Year of Reading or Poetrepository for her poems.

Kevin (Kevin's Meandering Mind) is back this year,
leaving poetry trax in the comments.

Jone, at DeoWriter, is doing a "double L" challenge. 
She and I are cross-poLLinating our challenges whenever possible.


  1. I love the visual appearance of the poem. Is that a special form with a name? I like the uncomfortable spikey-ness of it, or sometimes it looks like a drop and squash, equally devastating. At any rate, there's a motion that I like. And, as always, you are a master of the few words that focus greatly.


    1. This is my pun -- the poem's form is a Fib, following the Fibonacci sequence in the syllables (1, 1, 3, 5, 8), but the content is also a fib -- I'm quite happy right now! Life is good!

    2. Oops. I got the sequence wrong: 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8.

  2. worn and cracked leather
    discarded in the closet--
    despair of work boots

    So, I tried, but could not resist the pun.

  3. This poem definitely don't sound like you! I think the form is a perfect fit.

  4. I had forgotten about the "fib" poems, so at first I thought the despair came from telling a fib, always interesting to find what we 'find' in a poem. That wailing and wallowing, hiding in darkness shows it well, Mary Lee. (Glad it is a fib!)

  5. This image captures this emotion so carefully and well. I know this feeling. And I agree - perfect form fit! (I hope this is not really mirroring how you're feeling almost halfway through the month!) xo

  6. I love this, Mary. It can be difficult to write about a negative emotion, but you capture it perfectly

  7. This one works well as a fib indeed, and similarly glad to know you're not in despair. I also really like the image you chose, of the blackness, rounded but misshapen, floating in the whiteness....

  8. Mary Lee,
    Such a fun poem. I wondered if your poem was a fib or if your character could also be in fib. OK, that probably wasn't even funny. You created a picture of true despair with your words.