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DESPAIR--A FIB
I
curl
into
a tight ball,
pull covers over,
wail and wallow in darkness.
©Mary Lee Hahn, 2015
Carol, at Carol's Corner, will join me again this year as often as possible.
Kay, at A Journey Through the Pages, is joining, too!
Steve, at inside the dog, is sharing his poems
in the comments at Poetrepository.
Heidi, at my juicy little universe, will join us when she can.
Linda, at TeacherDance, will join as often as she can.
Check the comments at A Year of Reading or Poetrepository for her poems.
Kevin (Kevin's Meandering Mind) is back this year,
leaving poetry trax in the comments.
Jone, at DeoWriter, is doing a "double L" challenge.
She and I are cross-poLLinating our challenges whenever possible.
I love the visual appearance of the poem. Is that a special form with a name? I like the uncomfortable spikey-ness of it, or sometimes it looks like a drop and squash, equally devastating. At any rate, there's a motion that I like. And, as always, you are a master of the few words that focus greatly.
ReplyDeleteThanks!
This is my pun -- the poem's form is a Fib, following the Fibonacci sequence in the syllables (1, 1, 3, 5, 8), but the content is also a fib -- I'm quite happy right now! Life is good!
DeleteOops. I got the sequence wrong: 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8.
Deleteworn and cracked leather
ReplyDeletediscarded in the closet--
despair of work boots
So, I tried, but could not resist the pun.
**snort**
Delete:-)
This poem definitely don't sound like you! I think the form is a perfect fit.
ReplyDeleteI had forgotten about the "fib" poems, so at first I thought the despair came from telling a fib, always interesting to find what we 'find' in a poem. That wailing and wallowing, hiding in darkness shows it well, Mary Lee. (Glad it is a fib!)
ReplyDeleteThis image captures this emotion so carefully and well. I know this feeling. And I agree - perfect form fit! (I hope this is not really mirroring how you're feeling almost halfway through the month!) xo
ReplyDeleteI love this, Mary. It can be difficult to write about a negative emotion, but you capture it perfectly
ReplyDeleteThis one works well as a fib indeed, and similarly glad to know you're not in despair. I also really like the image you chose, of the blackness, rounded but misshapen, floating in the whiteness....
ReplyDeleteMary Lee,
ReplyDeleteSuch a fun poem. I wondered if your poem was a fib or if your character could also be in fib. OK, that probably wasn't even funny. You created a picture of true despair with your words.
Cathy